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| Exec Failure pt. 1; Poem by me | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 17 2005, 03:19 AM (312 Views) | |
| Iginla | Oct 17 2005, 03:19 AM Post #1 |
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I left sz
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When I posted it a couple weeks back it had no replies so Im reposting. IF YOU COME IN AND DONT REPLY ILL EAT YOU! <3?
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| cwetheri | Oct 17 2005, 06:52 AM Post #2 |
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I like it, very expressive. (Please don't eat me) |
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| Iginla | Oct 18 2005, 07:36 PM Post #3 |
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I left sz
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Thanks. That's a good thing
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| Sarah. | Oct 18 2005, 07:43 PM Post #4 |
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a trip and a half]. 303'32
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It's not bad... but at a few parts it seems like your stressing the rhyming pattern, if it flowed a little more smoothly, it might be better... it may just be the way I'm reading it though. ...And I don't really get a point from it. |
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| jelly belly | Oct 18 2005, 11:06 PM Post #5 |
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The SZ asshole
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rhyming night and tonight soooo does NOT work. it just sounds retarted, same with rhyming me and me. |
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| Iginla | Oct 19 2005, 10:53 AM Post #6 |
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I left sz
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It's my own style. I don't really ryme everything. But alexisonfire is cool though... |
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| jelly belly | Oct 19 2005, 03:53 PM Post #7 |
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The SZ asshole
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i know but rhyminng night and tonight just sounds lame, no offence.
ya man alexisonfrie rocks |
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| Iginla | Oct 19 2005, 09:31 PM Post #8 |
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I left sz
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None taken. Critisism always helps. |
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| Celia | Oct 19 2005, 09:48 PM Post #9 |
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Ð3AÐ
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Nice. Its a hell of alot better then what I could come up with. :S |
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| Iginla | Oct 20 2005, 02:07 AM Post #10 |
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I left sz
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Thanks ![]() I'm in the process of writing the sequel. It's gonna be most unpresidented. |
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