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| Exec Failure pt.2; One of my best poems... | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 20 2005, 02:16 AM (247 Views) | |
| Iginla | Oct 20 2005, 02:16 AM Post #1 |
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<3?? First one can be found here: http://forums.ifskinzone.net/index.php?showtopic=145841 IF I CATCH YOU IN MY TOPIC AND NOT REPLYING, ILL THREATEN YOU!
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| Guilty | Oct 20 2005, 01:40 PM Post #2 |
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Dude, that sounds great... I like this line...
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| Iginla | Oct 20 2005, 01:48 PM Post #3 |
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Thanks
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| Marxist | Oct 20 2005, 07:36 PM Post #4 |
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The Comedian
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It didn't really flow for me. Nice word choice though and verses just maybe get them to flow a bit better. |
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| Iginla | Oct 20 2005, 07:37 PM Post #5 |
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K Thanks. |
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| Passive | Oct 20 2005, 08:41 PM Post #6 |
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I'm a bit bored here in korea...
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Someone to strengthen you in your times of hardship. I like this poem. Kudos!!! And... I hate to be the one to point this out, but, it's spelled "positive." You may have noticed it otherwise. |
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| Iginla | Oct 21 2005, 01:44 AM Post #7 |
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Thanks. WTF?!?! why did I put two S's? :S |
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| karmakat | Nov 2 2005, 05:44 PM Post #8 |
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Your meters off a bit, so it doesnt flow...BUT If you will add the word AND to this line: The same pathway guides me through, Somehow right back AND straight to you. Then you should have no problems correcting the meter of the poem. |
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| Alpha | Nov 2 2005, 10:42 PM Post #9 |
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peace and love.
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Doesn't flow too well, but the meaning and the lines are so well said that it doesn't really matter. Bravo, great work.
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| Iginla | Nov 3 2005, 01:23 AM Post #10 |
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Thanks. |
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| benel | Nov 3 2005, 10:28 AM Post #11 |
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your poem sux http://www.cooksmate.nl/Koeken/Fotos_Koeke...ulde%20koek.jpg gevulde koek will pwn your fat ass |
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| zhane111 | Nov 3 2005, 03:34 PM Post #12 |
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Ignore Benel, it looks good in my opinion. |
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| Iginla | Nov 3 2005, 08:20 PM Post #13 |
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Rofl you dumb nub. I'd pwn a ******* pastry product anyday. |
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| benel | Nov 4 2005, 06:31 PM Post #14 |
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hmmm true...but you must admit it looks tasty
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| Iginla | Nov 4 2005, 08:25 PM Post #15 |
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I left sz
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That is irrelevent. |
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