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Break Me(Song Lyrics); meh, new style
Topic Started: Nov 2 2005, 11:39 PM (406 Views)
Iginla
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I don't think it's one of my best (I ain't posting my best here), but it is a new style so I thought I'd get some critique.

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Break Me

[Verse 1]
Give us a gun and we'll start shootin'
(Backed up with this .45 calibur state of lies)
Through the roof goes this town I'm built on
(But none of this makes a change, now hear my cries)
Around and around the torture wheel
(The state of authority is making its turn)
And I can't seem to fight this battle
(Fight this battle, your our last hope now)
Brought right here to this everlasting
(The everlasting mis-confidence)
It's a burden so often said
("Your the only one in my life and I swear")

[Chorus]
I took the path and never made too far
(Guided, mislead, I'm guided, mislead)
I followed my passion and only left with a scar
(Guided, mislead, now I'm guided, mislead)
Just remember the words they say
(Remember the words they say)
It's a burden so often said
("Your the only one in my life and I swear")

[Verse 2]
You showed me a smile and, led me away
(Promised that there would be, a better day)
I can't stand your torture
(pressure is building, tension is scaling)
So hang me by your blood red chains,
and then maybe I won't bleed the same.

[Chorus]
I took the path and never made too far
(Guided, mislead, I'm guided, mislead)
I followed my passion and only left with a scar
(Guided, mislead, now I'm guided, mislead)
Just remember the words they say
(Remember the words they say)
It's a burden so often said
("Your the only one in my life and I swear")

[Verse 3]
And now I rest here
(Now I rest here)
Look what you've done to me
(See what you've done to me)
Twelve great months is all we shared
(Twelve months later you never cared)
I can't get over this
(I won't get over this)
So chain me up and break me
All I have to say is I'm done.

[Chorus x2, second time softer]
I took the path and never made too far
(Guided, mislead, I'm guided, mislead)
I followed my passion and only left with a scar
(Guided, mislead, now I'm guided, mislead)
Just remember the words they say
(Remember the words they say)
It's a burden so often said
("Your the only one in my life and I swear")
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Juano
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Very nice lyricks man. Well thought out, like how it flows along with the chorus.
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Iginla
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Juano
Nov 2 2005, 10:26 PM
Very nice lyricks man. Well thought out, like how it flows along with the chorus.

*Claps hands*
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benel
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it's pretty nice :o

yes i made this comment nice :P
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Iginla
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it's pretty nice em_ohmy.gif

yes i made this comment nice em_tongue.gif


There we go. Much better.


Thanks everyone ^_^
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Sparks
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You should make that into a real song.
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Iginla
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Thanks :P
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Steve
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Awesome lyrics. :D
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Menindrag
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Really Nice Lyrics. I like it
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Iginla
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Thanks ^_^
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Jeff1337
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Is this a rap? :ermm:
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Night Star
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Really nice, you've got talent ^_^
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Burned
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:'( damn you, your better than me

great job :D
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Iginla
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Jeff1337
Nov 4 2005, 07:10 PM
Is this a rap? :ermm:

No. :| I'd classify it's genre (if it had music) as maybe Alternitive.


Thanks for the comments everyone. :grin:
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Pretty good lyrics!
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