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People who can read/write Japanese/Chinese; Help me with this please?
Topic Started: Nov 11 2007, 12:54 AM (378 Views)
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I wanted to know if the translation is accurate to be put into two different languages of stories I'm making: One is a original story and the other would be a fanfic for DNAngel. ><;; The stories will be in Chinese and Japanese but I don't know if they are accurate... The DNAngel fanfic... it'd be considered the same if these come out badly... What I mean is, if these translations didn't come out well, then that means my other story wouldn't come out good either...

My Original Story in Chinese (this is only the prologue):
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是飛過的是可能引起問題。 因為您是類類型A.,你,人們藐視您。 并且第二,人們希望為他們自己做使用您的力量。
您看見,那裡是六個類類型; A,是最強的。 例如,變換成動物的矮子、龍tamers、人們和天使。 類B是有力量的人們,但可能危害其他人; 不用一個危險方式。類C是人們以部分動物天性。 他們有貓動物耳朵或尾巴。 類D是有其他人或邪魔強烈的感覺的人們。類E是可以是受控的并且有正派,但反常力量在人之中的人們。 例如,能看未來的人們。 最後類,類F,是大手大腳的類。 是很容易控制的蛇神,貧賤類邪魔或者任何,但在巨大的數字。

您能看,在類A可能引起問題。 很好,為了女孩命名了Sora Serin,飛過能吮出色。 在她經常擊中的你,人和二,女孩恨她為是很美麗的。 時常,她會遇見恨她為她的力量的人。

她的全家是一個純淨的天使,意思,她來自所有是天使的家庭,或者飛過了生存。 他們恨它,每當其中一個傢伙飛過是愛上另一類,或者外部他們的種族。 Sora,另一方面,恨它。 負擔在嚴密的防備措施和嚴密的教學之下,嚴密您能認為的任何。 當祖父母最後說服了父母讓只有他們的女兒對住宿學校,以便他們可以得到一些休息, Sora 是十六她應該以十開始…

Here's the Japanese version of the story:
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飛ぶあって問題を起こすことができるであることは。 クラスのタイプA.であるので1つの人々は軽蔑する。 そして第二に、人々は自身にすることのためにあなたの力を使用するために望む。

6つのクラスのタイプ見たり、そこにである; A、最も強いがある。 例えば、動物に変形するエルフ、ドラゴンのtamers、人々、および天使。 クラスBは力がある、他の人々に害を与えることができる人々; ない危ない方法で。クラスCは部分動物本能の人々である。 それらに動物の猫耳か尾がある。 クラスDは他の人々または鬼の強い感覚がある人々である。クラスEは管理され、人間間の適当で異常な力がある人々である。 例えば、未来を見られる人々。 最後のクラス、クラスFは、ちょうど無駄なクラスである。 制御しとても易いゾンビ、下級のクラスの鬼または膨大な数の何でもしかし。

見ることができるようにクラスAのあることは問題を起こすことができる。 それで、なぜなら女の子はSora Serinを示した、飛んでトップクラスを吸うことができる。 1つ、彼女ので絶えず当られる人および2つの女の子はとても美しいのための彼女を憎む。 時々、彼女は彼女の力のための彼女を憎む人々に会う。

彼女の家族全員は純粋な天使、意味である、彼女によってはすべてが天使である来たり、または存在が飛んだ家族から。 彼らは飛あっている別のクラスとの仲間の1つが恋に落ち入る、またはちょうど憎む時はいつでも彼らの競争の外のそれを。 Soraは、一方では、それを憎む。 厳密な厳密な注意および厳密な教授の下で耐えられるあなたがについて考えることができる何でも。 残りを得てもいいように祖父母が寄宿学校に最終的に親を許可する彼らの娘だけ確信させたときにSoraは彼女が… 10時で始まるために仮定されたときに16だった

Yeah, if the translators are able to translate this, please put the translation in the reply... maybe just like the first few sentence so it wouldn't be too much of a bother to you. ><;; Again, I just want to know if this one translation site was accurate so I can translate this story for my Chinese/Japanese friends to read.
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I got this from a translator: (only first 150 words)

The prologue
has flown possibly causes the question. Because you are kind of type A., you, the people despise you. And second, the people hoped does for them uses your strength.
You see, there is six kind of types; A, is strongest. For example, transforms animal's dwarf, dragon tamers, the people and the angel. Kind of B has the strength people, but possible to harm other people; Does not use a dangerous way.Kind of C is the people by the partial animal instinct.
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If it were japanese I would've been of help. For the most part it makes sense even though the translated version doesn't. If you need further help a pm would be considerable.


天気の良い日を過しなさい。

Have a nice day
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Nov 11 2007, 01:09 AM
If it were japanese I would've been of help. For the most part it makes sense even though the translated version doesn't. If you need further help a pm would be considerable.


天気の良い日を過しなさい。

Have a nice day

The second version is Japanese.
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I realized that if a computer were to translate it, it'd come out wrong for some reason, even though I used it to translate it into a language, for example Chinese, my dad read it correctly.

I can't ask my dad to translate over 15,000+ words for a story so yeah.

That's why I want someone to physically translate this. ><;;
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To fly and being to cause problem as for being possible and being. Because it is type A. of class, one people scorn. And people desire the second, in order to use your power because of the thing which it makes itself.
There are six classes, it is; A, it is strongest, but it is.For example, tamers of the elf and the dragon which it becomes deformed in the animal, the people, and the angel.The people in class are powerful , they can deal great damage to the other classes. With the dangerous method without of being. Class C consists of part animal people, and instincts.There is a cat ear or a tail of the animal in those. Class D are the people who can analyze others strength. For example, "ogres are strong". Class E is managed, between the humans it is suitable, and they are the people who have abnormal power. For example, the people who can in vision the future.. Last class, class F is that of a wasteful class.It controls can control lesser zombies and ogres from other classes.


Sorry I took long, there were some rough translations I had trouble with. This is the first paragraph. I'll have the second later tomorrow I'll be resting.

Oh don't use online translators. They don't render japanese and traditional chinese properly. Being that I roughly translated this, it came out general, therefor it isn't very punctual. I will go over it properly tomorrow with my friend who is much better at translating.
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Ah ok... It just sounds so wrong because it doesn't sound like the original text, although it got some of it right...

Oh, would it be better if I put up the original text or would it be better to wait and then compare? =X
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Waiting and comparing sounds preferable. If you want. I only fixed some of the errors, the first few I ignored because it was less important.
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'Kay, I'll wait until you translate it more correctly, I guess. =/ Then I'll see if that can be used or not.

Thanks for translating in the first place! =] I'm happy you're able to at all!
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I translated this of the japanese part
To fly and being to cause problem as for being possible and being. Because it is type A. of class, one people scorn. And people desire the second, in order to use your power because of the thing which it makes itself. Type of six classes you see, it is there; A, it is strongest, but it is. For example, tamers of the elf and the dragon which it becomes deformed in the animal, the people, and the angel. The people who class B can be a power, give damage to the other people; With the dangerous method without of being.Class C is the people of part animal instinct. There is a cat ear or a tail of the animal in those. Class D is the people who is the feeling where the other people or the ogre are strong.Class E is managed, between the humans it is suitable and they are the people who is abnormal power. For example, the people who look at future. Last class and class F exactly are wasteful class. It controls and the very easy zombie and ogre of class of lower class or does perhaps with something of enormous numbers. In order for it to be possible to see, to cause problem it is possible to have class A. With that, because the girl showed Sora Serin, flying, it is possible to inhale top class. Because one, her the girl of the person and two always it hits is very beautiful hates her of for the sake of. Occasionally, she meets to the people who hate her for her power. Her whole family the pure angel, in sense, everything is the angel depending upon her, it came, or from the family which existence flew. As for them flying one of the companions of another class which has met falls to love and enters, when or hating exactly, with when that outside their competitions. Sora, on the one hand, hates that. Strict strict note and concerning you who withstand under strict professor can think with what which. In order to be possible to obtain remainder, the grandparents finally permit the parent in the lodging school when just their daughters where making be convinced as for Sora her… When being supposed in order to start at 10 o'clock, 16 was
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I realized that when I use machine change English text to a different language, it becomes weird and hard to understand. >.>

I have someone who can help translate my English story into Chinese though... And I have yet to find a Japanese one... =X
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Chinese Part:
Prelude

The flying is likely to cause problems. Because you type is type A., you, people defy you. And second, people want to do their own use your strength.
You see, there are six categories type A, is strongest. For example, transform into animals of the Dwarfs, the dragon tamers, people and angels. Category B is powerful people, but may harm other people; not a dangerous manner. Category C is the part of people to animal nature. They have the animal ears or tail cat. Class D is any other person or demon strong feeling of the people. Class E can be controlled and there are upright, but in the unusual strength of those people. For example, people can see the future. The final category, Class F, the class is extravagantly used. Control is easy to snake god from poverty, or any kind demon, but in great numbers.

You can see, in the Class A may cause problems. Well, in order to girls named Sora Serin, flying to suck outstanding. She often hit you, and the girls hate her as a very beautiful. Often, she would hate her as she met the strength of the people.

Her whole family is a pure angel, which means that she is an angel from all the family, or a flying survival. They hate it, whenever one is in love with another guy flying, or outside their race. Sora, on the other hand, hate it. Burden tight preparedness measures and strict teaching under tight you can think of any. When grandparents finally persuaded parents only allow their daughter to boarding schools so that they can get some rest, Sora is 10 to 16, she should begin ...

Japanese One:
Flying there can cause problems, it is. Class A. type because one of the people despise. And in the second place, people have to own it for you to use the power of hope.

Six of the class or type of watch, and there; A, the most powerful. For example, animals deformed Elf, Dragon tamers, people, and Angel. Class B will have the power, other people can do harm to people; no dangerous way. Class C is the part of an animal instinct of the people. Those animals cat ears or tail. Class D is a demon or other people have a strong sense of the people. Class E is managed by the man between the appropriate anomaly of a people. For example, people can see the future. The last class, class F, class is just useless. The very things that zombie control the lower classes of the huge number of demons or anything but.

You can see it is a Class A can cause problems. And because girls are Sora Serin on Wednesday, flying in the top to breathe can be. One, because she constantly当RA people and the two girls are very beautiful for her to hate. Sometimes, she was in her power for her to meet the people hate.

Her whole family is a pure angel, meaning, she is by all of the angels here, or the presence flung family. They are flying in different classes and friends of one of falling in love enter, or just hate whenever their competition out of it. Sora, meanwhile, hate it. Rigorous strict and rigorous attention professor under tolerable you can think about anything. The rest is a good way to get grandparents boarding school ultimately allow parents to assure them of their only daughter when she was Sora, but ten starts with the assumption for the time 16.
P.S OK, I used Google Translator but it looks accurate and legible.
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x.x ack...

Can someone please close this topic? I understand that using the computer generated translation would kill the words in my story so... x.x yeah...

Because people are translating... but like... I don't need it anymore... x.x
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x.x ack...

Can someone please close this topic? I understand that using the computer generated translation would kill the words in my story so... x.x yeah...

Because people are translating... but like... I don't need it anymore... x.x

What do you think would be different with the story if it was computer translated?
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Nov 11 2007, 04:53 PM
DarkAngel013
Nov 11 2007, 11:52 PM
x.x ack...

Can someone please close this topic? I understand that using the computer generated translation would kill the words in my story so... x.x yeah...

Because people are translating... but like... I don't need it anymore... x.x

What do you think would be different with the story if it was computer translated?

The words are all mixed up and it doesn't even make sense or closely relate to my story. Sure, I can bits and pieces of my story but, it doesn't make sense. D: Like, here's the original:


Prologue

Being a winged being can cause problems. One, people despise you since you are class type A. And secondly, people would like to use your powers for their own doing.

You see, there are six class types; A, being the strongest. For example, elves, dragon tamers, people who transform into animals, and angels. Class B are people who have powers, but can harm other people; not in a dangerous way. Classes C are people with part animal instincts. They have cat ears or tails of animals. Class D are people who have strong senses of other people or Demons. Class E is people who can be controlled and have a decent but abnormal power among humans. For example, people who are able to see the future. The last class, class F, are just a wasteful class. Zombies, lowly class Demons or anything that are so easy to control, but in huge numbers.

As you can see, being in Class A can cause problems. Well, for a girl named Sora Serin, being winged can suck big time. One, guys hit on her constantly and two, girls hates her for being so beautiful. From time to time, she would meet people who hate her for her powers.

Her whole family is a pure angel, meaning, she came from a family who all are angels, or winged beings. They hate it whenever one of the fellows winged-being falls in love with another class, or just outside their race. Sora, on the other hand, hates it. Born under strict precautions and strict teachings, strict anything you can think of. When the grandparents finally convinced the parents to let their only daughter to a boarding school so that they can get some rest, Sora was sixteen when she was supposed to start at ten…


See the difference?
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